Change

         In my essay from following "Chadams World Travel Blog" I will be reorganizing my thesis, allowing myself to connect with the reader more in the beginning of the writing. Also, I will add more details to my paragraphs for supporting my thesis and how identity is shown through the blog.  I believe that I touched well and connected with others on what my main points and reasonings are.  Still though I am attempting to alter how I word things, to be sure that it is all in similar tenses and how it can be a little more intriguing to the reader. The writing still needs to be intertwined more with eachother and personal information should be shared more often in the blog so that it does not seem to be informatory.